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Chapter 98 Homesteading in a fantasy world

🕑 Added 2022-11-02 18:42:01 +0000 UTC

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Apinsig

Understandable tnx for expressing your problem. Didn't even know the word 'brevity' and it's meaning before today

Enk

Try understanding it when you don't even recall what skills the adventurer class has. You'll quickly realise that it's *not* clear, it's why i suggest dumping the brevity. It's narratively unnecessary, and unhelpful for those like me who don't have photographic memories.

ShadeByTheSea

It's clearly talking about the body skill for his adventurer class. it's what he's been talking about for the last two paragraphs. I personally don't think the change from 25 to 35 was needed. In fact I like 25 a lot better. It's not like it's easy to get a skill to 25, and this is only level 1 of his adventurer class. If you can't get a skill to the needed level after going through a war, and using advanced knowledge, for the first skill of a class than almost no one is a level 2 adventurer in my book.

Enk

I'm not enjoying the brevity. I bet your editor will hate it, when it comes to comprehension. It'd be great to get more words in! E.g. "It’s not the worst thing it would just take a lot longer and I need to dive further into this skill to truly level it up... ": it's not clear to me wth skill you're referring to. Info from some meeting with the 3rd party is obviously being mentally digested by MC - the meeting's details itself would have been more interesting to my mind (you know, maybe, imo etc). Don't shorten things just to avoid mistaken grammar or something like that - the story is the thing! I wish there was provision on this dumb site for 3rd party edit-suggestions, there are ppl here who could trivially contribute in that way.


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