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Chapter 185 - Helping around the camp

🕑 Added 2021-02-03 13:00:04 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections. I always forget the extra N in lightning lol The poked thins means he actually poked them to get their attention. Like he had to touch them otherwise no one would notice.

Aldous Russell

Thanks! "lighting" should be "lightning" (x2). "poked" might be better as "peeked". "could listen" should be "hear". "group who was" should be "were". "group communicating by text" should be "communicated". I think "group spent... possibilities when" would be better as "group had spent". I think "ground. Leaving" would be better as "ground, leaving". I think "Only when Bonnie thought about using." would be better as "It was only when Bonnie thought of using". "They all find quests" should be "found". I think "you prepare better the reward" should be "you prepare, the better the reward".


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