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Chapter 167 - Turtle Eggs

🕑 Added 2021-01-02 13:01:05 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thank you so much for all the help. Somehow I feel like this one is less 'bad' than the others. I mean the mistakes seem less severe lol. But now that the new year started and I can take my time a little better I'll do my best to have almost none in the next chapter

Aldous Russell

Thanks! "furrowing its brown" should be "brow". I think "bow like" would be better as "bow-like". I think "then it started" might be better as "then did it start". "view was that Hera" should be "was it that". "We just meet" should be "met". I think "managed to say the line holding back her laughter" should be "line, holding" or "line, while holding". I think "spread in a way" might be better as "spread to an extent". I think "He asked the group" might be better as "Runir asked", as the subject of the sentence before is Bill. I think "testimonials" should be "testimonies". I think "bad shapes" should be "shape".


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