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Chapter 171 - New arrangements

🕑 Added 2021-01-09 13:00:02 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the help! I changed the first to 'it has been' using had feels like a double past since been is already in the past tense. I'm not sure if it makes sense, but it feels off. Same thing with the 'this has been'. I changed to avoid any problems. I completely missed the With what Hera line. Changed to be what I wanted to say

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "It's been just two days" should be "It'd" or "It had". "breakfast is read" should be "ready". "story brought" should be "store bought". I think "this has been" should be "had". I think "them on Hazelpond" should be "in". "shared the room" should be "a". "they someone to take" should be "they had someone". "picked a sheet" should be "picked up". "how the spell work" should be "works". I think "don't use as much" should be "doesn't". I think "deleting that email" might be better as "email account". I think "ember-colored" should be "amber". The sentence starting "With what Hera" is incomplete. "sell those" should be "these". "money with those" should be "these".


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