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Chapter 173 - Back to the rave

🕑 Added 2021-01-13 13:00:06 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for all the help! I have to say, there are less mistakes than I expected. I reviwed this chapters in a sleep deprived state yesterday lol

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "Not only it felt much more" would be better as "Not only did it feel". I think "that cold would" would be better as "cold would". I think "handaxe on the sprite" would be better as "into". "She flowed it up with" should be "followed". I think "to make... to leak out" should be "to make... leak out" or "begin to leak out". I think "overwhelming it by the" would be better as "with" "Did you knew" should be "know". I think "Blue picked her tablet" would be better as "took out". I think "whatever that was" would be better as "it". I think "The light spirits started to move" should be "spirit".


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