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Chapter 179 - Meeting the Crafters

🕑 Added 2021-01-23 13:00:07 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections. I thought I was doing better but damn lol. I changed a few phrases to convey the same feeling just because they sounded better. The 'off the table', and the 'had had' for instance. It's funny cause the 'liquid, arriving' kept showing the comma as a mistake on gramarly when I wrote, but when I changed it now it didn't flag it. Go figure

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "arrived almost at sunrise" would be better as "had returned". I think "in their clothing" would be better as "on". "know metals" should be "known". "chemic" should be "chemical". "paper mache" should be "papier-mâché". "caesium can make" has an extra space. I think "first ones to leave" would be better as "disembark". "on his actions" should be "in". I think "comes with that attitude" would be better as "comes out with". "taking out" should be "taking it out". "over 2 PM" should be "after". I think "had enchanted her chakram" would be better as "had had her chakram enchanted". I think "see it better" would be better as "see better" or "see them better". I think "out of the table" would be better as "off the table" or "out of the running". I think "It's been less than" would be better as "It was less than". I think "liquid arriving" would be better as "liquid, arriving". I think "was by getting" should be "for". I think "information on skill" should be "skills". "towards her training" should be "to". I think "to make more delicate work" might be better as "to do more". "are used to" should be "were".


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