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Chapter 181 - How many runs does it take?

🕑 Added 2021-01-27 13:00:05 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections. the 'a three meals' is the Mario in me trying to pop out lol Changed the worse to weirder, it think it can work better. Don't know where in the nine hells the toiled came from lol

Aldous Russell

Thanks! "toiled" should be "toilet" or "toilets". I think "some Pie" should be "pie". I think "than I should" should be "than I should have". I think "we are doing this for so long" would be better as "we've been doing this for so long". "before risk" should be "before we risk" or "before risking". "and a three meals" should be "and three". I think "monsters they face" should be "faced". "arms for being hit" should be "from". I'm not sure about "only get worse". Maybe "better"? "no signal" should be "sign".


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