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Chapter 182 - Kobold Field

🕑 Added 2021-01-29 13:01:01 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections! The Weller Smitty is not a smithy belonging to the Wellers, its the actual name of the shop (with the typo) I was worried that the part with the 'they could be simple' would be too long but it ended up flowing nicely, thanks! I really need to be more careful with my S at the end of words lol. Not gonna lie the cauldron of bats was a nice surprise. I thougn it would be family or something like it XD

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "the user... its running speed" should be "their". I think "they would face" might be better as "they faced". "tanker" should be "tank". I think "the Weller Smitty" should be "Weller's Smithy", although they mean the same thing in Scots. I like "cauldron of bats" - nice one. ^_^ I think "The man" might be better as "That man". "all the time she failed" should be "times". "to figure out" should be "figure it out". "on their names" should be "in". I think the part after "They could be simple" should be a list, separated by commas or semi-colons, instead of separate sentences. "simply beast" should be "beasts". "warning by the Ferals. 'Avoid" should be "warning about the Ferals: 'Avoid". "after it fell" should be "after it's fallen'."


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