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Chapter 203 - One way out

🕑 Added 2021-03-06 13:01:01 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections! Sorry it took me a while to reply. Had a weird couple of days.

Aldous Russell

Thanks! "area she was on" should be "in". I think "calling her out" might be better as "calling out to her" or "calling out". I think "mend" should be "Mend". "hasn't used in a while" should be "hadn't". "She never used in a dungeon" should be "She had never used it in". "Its fur was" should be "Her fur". I think "Seeing that Hera's heart" would be better as "Seeing that, Hera's heart". I think "Did anyone ever went there" would be better as "Has anyone ever gone there" or "been there". "than you think" should be "you'd". I think "Another was to fight alone" might be better as "It was another thing entirely to fight alone", or something. I think "the commanders who were" might be better as "commanders, who". I think "She could've been slim" should be "might've". "the seconds for the next" should be "to". I think "belly flopping into the trail" should be "belly-flopping onto". I think "the earth started to move" should maybe be "Earth".


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