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Chapter 205 - Boothudurn Peaks

🕑 Added 2021-03-10 13:00:04 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections! I re wrote that last paragraph a few times, and that headed up thing was something from a earlier draft, my bad.

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "to see it outside" should be "to see outside". "Braking a few branches" should be "Breaking". "How long it would take for her to wake up." should be "How long would it take for her to wake up?" "the kobolds sisters" should be "kobold". I think "IT CAN CAUSE" should be "COULD". "tree leave" should be "leaves". "How did you found" should be "find". I think "how the hell did you found" would be better as "how the hell you found". "how can I be happy" should have a question mark. I think "wait to yell at me before" should be "until". I think "left the cave and headed up" should be just "left the cave", because she hasn't decided to head up yet.


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