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Chapter 207 - The city under the mountain

🕑 Added 2021-03-13 13:01:01 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections. I felt like the 'out' in the first line was a bit out of place with your version, so I left it out. the art deco thing freaked me out, every corrector said one thing I don't know what's real anymore lol

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "we figure something else" might be better as "we can figure something else out". "that it all true" should be "it's". "but believe in you here" would be better as "but to believe in you, here". "but did I ever lied to you" might be better as "but have I ever". I think "art deco" and "art déco" should be "Art Deco". "carved on the side of the mountain" should be "into". "and rose the stick" should be "raised". "shutting the door close" should be "closed" or just "shutting the door". "I appreciate" should be "appreciate it" and possibly have a full stop. "When... opened. They were" should be a comma.


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