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Chapter 211 - What will the humans do

🕑 Added 2021-03-20 13:01:01 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections! I messed up and forgot to talk about the doors to the side. My bad. Made a small adjustment to add that info

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "and showed around" would be better as "and showed them around". "Telanz expression" should be "Telanz's". "You build a house" should be "built". "or live here" should be "life". "the girl's measurements" should be "girls' ". "easy to move and sturdy" should be "move in". "Fethy presence" should be "Fethy's". "to where it would be their new house" should be "to what would be". "walls were outside were" should be "walls outside were". It sounds like there are no bedrooms, so are the beds in the living room?

Perizou

My bad, I thought about making something a bit weirder at first, but gave up on that

GuyWhoReadsALot

You say the house is divided into two rooms, then you list three rooms. A bathroom is a room, it's even in the name.


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