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Chapter 186 - Night shift

🕑 Added 2021-02-05 13:00:04 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections! I get what you said about scouting towers. Can't say why I didn't put Lookout towers lol. I changed a bit the first cursing line, the are those wouldn't work with the way the word 'show' was set up. In the end, when I say 'those creatures' Hera is thinking back at the ones she fought during the test. Not specifically this kobold, but that type of kobold. not sure if it makes sense or it's just in my head lol.

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "and by looking at the clock on her tablet" would be better as "going by the clock". I think "grappling in large creatures" should be "on". I think "scouting tower" should be "lookout" - I interpret scouting as meaning sneaking out and looking for stuff, rather than defending. "all the Dragon Kin was sleeping" should be "were". I think "fuck those fucking things" might be better as "fuck are those", but I guess it depends how tired she is. I think "Only in the morning that the kobolds would prepare them" would be better as "Only in the morning would kobolds prepare them" or "The kobolds planned to prepare them only in the morning". I think "lose the other two" might be better as "shake" or "shake off". Lose would make more sense if they were chasing her. "those creatures" should be "these". I think "originate on her hands" should be "in". "on its face" should be "in". "put off the fire" should be "out".

Theredscare77

Yikes that was a close one. The dangers of adventuring without coffee.


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