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Chapter 187 - The wolves Attack

🕑 Added 2021-02-06 13:00:02 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections! In the case of the first line, it was the same Kobold that gave the group the letters in a platter. It doesn't have a name but there is only a single Kobold with that outfit. The be fine, can't be a full stop. When splitting a dialogue like that, the separation between quotes is always a comma. I can't remember the names, bu a couple of people sent me articles explaining just that because I always used a full stop before. I changed the Anyone Saw something line, reading it again it fells.. off.

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "The kobold wearing" should be "A". I think "walked in here" should be "there". I think "be fine," For a moment" should be a full stop. "pulled her weapons" should be "pulled out". "Galva, run towards" has an extra space. "why do they insist" should have a question mark. "the one on her arms" should be "in". I think "slammed the projectile" should be "slammed into". I think "the kobolds didn't have an advance title" should be "kobold... advanced". "Anyone saw something" should be "seen".


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