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Chapter 195 - Getting ready for battle

🕑 Added 2021-02-20 13:00:03 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections! I was 100% sure that saying I was doing better would come back to haunt me lol I changed the spell like to spell such as, gramarly was weird and it felt better. And I really need to rmember the S in the end of kobolds when there are many of them around

Aldous Russell

Thanks! "on their handbook" should be "in". I think "exaggerate" might be better as "over-exert". I think "with just the four" should be "four of them". I think "that weren't available" might be better as "weren't available last time". I think "group of Canine Kobold" should be "canine kobolds". "nocturne" should be "nocturnal". I see this pretty often in American English, so maybe it's a localisation thing, but "a couple massive" should be "a couple of massive". "the Light Fur" should be "Light Fur". "two fight. While" would be better as a comma. "the wounded kobold" should be "kobolds". I think "heal spells" should maybe be "healing"? I think "Not just that. The" might be better as something other than a full-stop. Maybe a comma, semi-colon or em-dash. "nurser" should be "nurses". "with nothing to show" might be better as "show for it" or "show for the effort". I think "spell-like" would be better without the hyphen, or with parentheses around "like Hera's pulse" (commas or em-dashes). I think "high prices. Even" would be better as a comma. "closer it would be from" should be "to". I think "spell in the Timeless" should be "to". "they've met up" should be "they".


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