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Chapter 197 - Greeting a wolf

🕑 Added 2021-02-24 13:01:00 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections! Changed the title thing for 'accompanied' I have no clue if I'm gonna make a 'Marksman Alpha' or something so it's better to get ahead of that lol I didn't get what you meant in the "We are kobold' line isn't that one the same as the fix you showed?

Aldous Russell

Thanks! "sat down in the logs" should be "on". "here, and there" shouldn't have a comma. I think "title that followed it" should maybe be "preceded". In the example, 'Alpha' is at the end of the title, not the beginning. I think "There were the leaders" should maybe be "these"? "Those who become" should be "became". I think "We are kobold" should be "kobold". I think "leaving his canines perpetually exposed" should be "one canine", since the scar is on one side. "Even Golden Moon" has an extra space. I think "long pause, according to the compendium. Golden Moon" should be "long pause. According to the compendium, Golden Moon". I think "with black fur with heterochromatic" should be "fur and". "went for I hate" should be "from". "Dragon Kin. Having Blue" should be a comma. "explores" should be "explorers". "hop in sweet cheeks" should be "on, sweet" "but it was only until" should be "that was".


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