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Chapter 271 - Professional Work

🕑 Added 2021-07-03 13:00:06 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections!

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "while the healer understood the effects" would be better as "analyzed". "stay on the back of the room" should be "at". I think "replaced that with gashes made by her broadswords" would be better as "replaced them with gashes made with her broadswords", maybe. I think "make her look" would be better as "make the bride look". I think "incredible future ahead" would be better as "ahead of her". I think "I wouldn't say there were" should be "they" or "it was". I think "have to stay sometime away" might be better as "stay away for a time", or something. I think "telling that there were" would be better as "telling her" or "stating that". I think "She spent almost" should be "She had spent". I think "bowling ball, just much heavier from" would be better with the comma between "heavier" and "from" (or another comma). I think "said the legacy name" would be better as "legacy's". I think "They even had one team to head inside first, and the information that only 9 attempts remained already appeared" would be better as "They had one team head inside first, and the message that only 9 attempts remained appeared". I think "came to either of their minds" might be better as "occurred to either of them".


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