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Chapter 272 - Over the edge

🕑 Added 2021-07-05 13:00:08 +0000 UTC

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BeepBoop

I am sad that they haven't tried role playing as a foreign Princess doing a favour for Princess A(something) and checking the preparations. And how good that they did, since this and that is needs to be doing and how incompetent Vetek is. (They list the tasklist)

Perizou

Thanks for the corrections. I still find weird the extra s in things like 'Sevaris's'

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "find what caused it" might be better as "unlocked". "in Sevaris case" should be "in Sevaris' case" or "Sevaris's". "Sevaris cleaned his throat" should be "cleared". "in the right hand" should be "on". "for dwarven standards" should be "by". "in the best help" should be "health". I think "ground I walked" might be better as "walk" or "tread". I think "else to do here" should be "there". I think "all dwarves stopped" should be "all the".


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