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Chapter 294 - Ironic Talk Show

🕑 Added 2021-08-13 13:01:02 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections!

Aldous Russell

Thanks! "as much Hera and Blue wanted" should be "as much as". I think "direct the story in a way" might be better as "in a particular way". I think "but I never lied in anything I did" might be better as "I've never lied about anything I've reported". I think "has its use" might be better as "uses". I think "that will help the people" should be "this". I think "something in a grey area" might be better as "of". I think "being in a morning show" should be "on". I think "odd expression coming from the girls" might be better as "odd expressions the girls were wearing". "lazying around" should be "lazing". I think "She was talking with Hera" would be better as "She had been". "to do was send was to send" should be "to do was send". I think "team working" would be better as "teamworking". "her girlfriend on a video" should be "in". "two-syllable name.' Hera" should be "name'. Hera". I think "There were the usual bad" might be better as "was the usual crap". I think "about the order" should probably be "Order". I think "take my mind out of things" should be "off of things".

Mike G.

Good chapter, thanks! "Oh, Ninleyn, just let me know... No comma after Ninleyn...


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