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Chapter 296 - A thread to follow

🕑 Added 2021-08-16 13:01:09 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections! The order thing. I decided to keep any mention of 'the order' in lower case and use upper case if they are saying the full name. It's because there are other 'orders' and things like that

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "shoving a cup of coffee on her nose. Trying" might be better as "into" and a comma. I think "talking inside her mug" would be better as "into" or "through". "legacy does that to" should be "do". "still present on meat" should be "in". "diet is mostly made out of" should be "made up of". "does the Herald controls" should be "control". I think "Or it would be just an automatic reaction" would be better as "Or is it just". I think you've got a few "order" which should be "Order". I think "thread on his hand" should be "in". I think "get a new whenever" should be "new one". I think "send you to a trial run" would be better as "on". I think "like she would do it for me" would be better as "do for me". I think "in a good position to fight" should maybe be "condition". I think "searching for or found" should be "has found". I think "If I remember this correctly" would be better without "this". "Helen" should be "Helena". I think "the mage didn't sit down" should be "hadn't sat". "not to, you know. Post" should be a comma. "as much ... enough. Each" should be a comma. "but if ... gold. You can" should be a comma. "back on earth" should be "Earth".


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