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Chapter 307 - Lurking

🕑 Added 2021-09-04 13:00:06 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections! I changed a bit the poison rain part. Hera made it appear under the monster and shot the poison up, Bonnie on the other side sandwiched the creature with spells. Now I think it's clearer

Aldous Russell

Thanks! "was and a construction" doesn't need "and". "hotel, and surrounding" should be "hotel and, surrounding". "Continuing their track" should be "trek". I think "felt tired talking" would be better with a comma "tired, talking". I think "because for them, seeing" would be better as "because, for them, seeing". I think "ever got around that" should be "to that". I think "but I rather not" would be better as "I'd". "and pulled a large gun" should be "pulled out". "that resemble" should be "resembled". I think "to give problems" might be better as "cause". "with a blunt weapon" should be "the". I think "rain under" should be "over" or "at". I think "all projectiles" might be better as "all the". I think "the restrain" should maybe be "restraint", "restraints" or "restrained condition".


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