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Chapter 308 - 5th Layer

🕑 Added 2021-09-06 13:01:03 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections! I really dropped the ball in the corrections lately. My bad.

Aldous Russell

Thanks! "The thing wasn't by no means small" should be "was". I think "moved them through the path" might be better as "along" or "down". "with a hand covering their mouths" should be "with hands". I think "outpost was in a grassy plain" should be "on". I think "It only works if I put mana" might be better as "It's only active when I put mana in". "one of the serves" should be "servers". "her food. Making sure" should be a comma. I think "penguins that live near water" might be better as "lived near the water". "before gets dark" should be "before it". I think "But here is close to noon" should be "here it's". "to get in a safe place" should be "get to". "telling my plans" should be "telling you". I think "You know. I really" would be better as a comma.


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