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Chapter 309 - Forest of Dreams

🕑 Added 2021-09-08 13:00:07 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections!

Aldous Russell

Thanks! I think "The group left the city" might be better as "had left". "whit" should be "with". "on her gun" should be "into". I think "wrapped around everyone's waist" should be "wrapped them... waists". I think "Blue pulled out the ball" should maybe be "pushed"? "withing" should be "within". I think "be like, actual" would be better as "be, like, actual". I think "we go thinking" should be "go in". "monster,we" is missing a space. I think "as it usually happened" should be "as usually happened" or "as usual". "doorway," Good" has the speech mark in the wrong position. "night should star" should be "start". "continued their journey. Everyone constantly" should be a comma. "It's the first time I see one" should be "I've seen".


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