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Chapter 282 - Slumber Party

🕑 Added 2021-07-23 13:00:08 +0000 UTC

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Aldous Russell

Thanks! "Guys, Guys" should be "Guys, guys". I think "in that cloud" would be better as "at". "leaks, mana" shouldn't have a comma. "It had a minor enchantment" should be "They". I think "while keeping the mobility" might be better as "without inhibiting her mobility". I think "One thing was for sure. Waiting" should be a semi-colon, colon, em-dash or comma. "on Hera's level" should be "at". I think "not only she couldn't target" would be better as "not only could she not target". "I rather stay" should be "I'd". I think "Silah and Hera took the balcony" would be better as "had taken". I think "seemed more apart" would be better as "further". I think "if even among dwarves, there were" would be better as "if, even among dwarves, there were". I think "but this is all in good fun" would be better as "it's all in". "raised on earth" should be "Earth". I think "an alliance where all" might be better as "in which all".


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