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Chapter 286 - Rematch atop the mountain

🕑 Added 2021-07-30 13:00:08 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections!

Aldous Russell

Thanks! "montain" should be "mountain". I think "several yellow particles" might be better as "clouds of". For me several suggests a small, countable number (like more than 5, but less than 20), but I think you mean there's a large, uncountable number. I think "a large red pond, and some clouds formed a sort of stairway" might be better as "was a large red pond", unless the pond is part of the stairway. I think "on the stones" would be better as "in". "then again. Since" should be a comma. I think "griffons who was triggered" should be "which were" or "which had just". I think "power leveling" would be better as "power-levelling". "from its perch. Flying around" should be a comma. "No. those invaders" should be "No, these invaders". "going towards them" should be "coming". "sent it back the way it came" should be "them... they". "walked over the monster" should be "to the". "couldn't help identifying" should be "identify". I think "stop by Risli, but they called the Shaman" should be "Risli's... they had". "picked a few extra coats" should be "picked up". I think "In the outdoors" would be better as "Once outdoors". "full blow archeological digging" should be "full-blown archaeological dig". I think "entirely that her strike finally stopped" would be better as "did her striking finally stop". I think "were already with her buffs flaring" should be "ready... their".

Michael Hughes

That was fast. Which outsider brought in a wendigo to an isolated room then? It would have had nothing to consume outside of the mountain.


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