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Chapter 288 - The other side of the story

🕑 Added 2021-08-02 13:01:04 +0000 UTC

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Perizou

Thanks for the corrections. I have to double check the apostrophe thing. And the order I only capitalize when I'm writing the full name.

Aldous Russell

Thanks! "get out of the can" should be "get off". "on the bath" should be "in". "part of the laws is" should be "their laws are" or "their law is". "sat on the chair" should be "in a chair". "dwarves, elves, beastman" should be "beastmen". "what Valyra said" should be "Kadmek". I think "They already asked for some land" should be "will have already" or "They'll ask for a little land". I think "She never saw a war" should be "She had never seen". "some journals with recounting" shouldn't have "with". I think "explorer's Guild" should be capitalised. I think you're maybe not consistent about the apostrophe? Maybe "Explorers' Guild". "just an advice coming from an individual not" should be "just advice... individual, not". "you around. Will he" should be a comma. I think "self-benefit" would be better as "self-interest". I think you're not capitalising three heroes consistently. I think "double checked" would be better hyphenated. I think "Did they ask anything" should be "ask for". "version of its though" should be "it". I think "around the guild" should be capitalised. "Fethy rose her hand" should be "raised". "if we change. I promise" should be a comma. "about the heroes. Hera" is missing a speech mark. I think "order" should potentially be capitalised.

Perizou

They absolutely could. The thing is, no one in Boothudurn knows that option exists, and the Guild/UMN is not going to just say that since they would have no benefits from it. However, when the internet comes around and they start having more information, that might change

Munirah Hutchinson

I'm really skeptical of why Boothudurn HAS to join any big organisation. Why not be independent and sign specific agreements with each organisation?


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