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Be a Dragon: Punishment (ch.10)

🕑 Added 2020-04-29 14:42:10 +0000 UTC

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Dragontaylor

Harem detected 😣

DaemonDeadKing

Ehh I still don’t like Neo but she doesn’t ruin the story. I feel she doesn’t add much other then comic relief.

Dust

originally i was kinda against Neo, mostly because she's a complete shit stirrer but now you have brought me over. Noice.

Garend

There are no dufflebags to be on the floor, because you edited them out. The money should just be scattered about. Also, the bag of sex toys was crushed in the car, so that would have been left behind. She only had the dildo and lube on her when Hinata grabbed her to GTFO. Thus is the peril of going back and editing shit. EDIT: And the sequence of events also has to be changed, as does her motivation and so on. It doesn't mesh.


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