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Power Corrupts: Bleak Falls Barrow (ch. 38)

🕑 Added 2020-06-20 15:00:35 +0000 UTC

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Benjamin Lawton

Was re-reading the last few chapters, when something occurred to me: When Jericho & co. go to Riften, <i>Lili</i> should be the one to do the Thieves' Guild questline, not Jericho himself. He's big to the point of being impossible to miss, and his focus is almost entirely on Warrior skills; whereas Lili is small, easily overlooked as a child, and already has significant progress in a number of Thief skills, anyway. Moreover, she has the mindset needed, even though it was never really something she was proud of.

Ahtu Nyarlathotep

Hmm, my comment ran away, how bothersome... Don't feel like doing it all over again... General point: Magic, fast way to level up again, burden can be used as a spell or enchantment. Alteration, enchanting and restoration are essential to complete and compensate in his build/style.

Ahtu Nyarlathotep

Hmm didn't think about that part about the "Evergleam", "Eldergleam."* Looks and sounds so familiar, that I didn't even notice it. But I recall there was some rather jarring sentence structure at some point, like half a sentence was missing. I'll take a look at it in a moment. I believe it was at some point when he was moving the wagon, or just after that.

Benjamin Lawton

There isn't, but then a LOT of emphasis has been put into showcasing just how dumbed-down the game experience is, compared to THIS Skyrim. Assume nothing.

Benjamin Lawton

A couple of typos found: First, the tree we're supposed to use Nettlebane on is called the "Eldergleam". (Parent of the "Gildergreen" in Whiterun, inb4 that comes up.) Second, the "sear the wounds shut" effect that lightsabers (and other fiery weapons) have is spelled "cauterize".

Ahtu Nyarlathotep

Curses! I was greedy for more, I wanted to see them go up against the Dragon Priest(though I don't think there was one, at any level in the game).

Jcxxx1990

Good chapter which progresses the story along nicely, i think for this story and with what you have said in past about developing the plot line to be continuous, you do need to keep developing your side characters and hashing them out with their own unique personalities like you have with Lily, maybe a couple of interludes or side story’s perhaps going deeper into why they follow/love Jericho or whatever their motives maybe.... Jericho should also look into maybe purchasing poisons to consume which will make fights harder for him maybe earning more experience, or just building up more of a tolerance to poisons which will help him further down the line. Also if Jericho is concerned with Hestia and all the killing she knows that will happen in this world why not use the system that is used in Markarth with Cidhna mine, where bandit prisoners mine Jericho’s new found metal veins under hired guards.


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