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Legends Never Die: Celebration (ch. 14)

🕑 Added 2022-10-26 14:55:29 +0000 UTC

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Bud

If i can offer some criticism, try to be less specific with the number of casualties and deaths. "Their count was about eight hundred dead on Sigfred’s side and half that dead on the Franks", The issue is i doubt most scouts of this time period could even count that high, let alone estimate with such accuracy and it breaks immersion. Instead try to be more poetic about it. "King Sigfred force far less well than ours my Jarl. The Franks fight well and the battle turned against the King. The Gods showed their disfavour and many hundred of his warriors have fallen for little Christian blood in return. He fights on still but will not for much longer, I fear there will be a great slaughter if naught changes".

IG884HIRE

I really like how his interpretation of exp and other gains being the favor of his gods drives him. Makes it feel very different than other Gamer fics.


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