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🕑 Added 2024-07-31 17:54:16 +0000 UTC

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Ranma_Leopard

I liked the experiment at the end!! Id love to see more It!!

JACOB HEBERT

Iono does have a point, I wonder what electric types in Kanto that Pierce may encounter??? (I Favor Swagnemite Always)

Thomas Hendrix

and write the comments for that then move on to the show and so on and so forth. Hope this helps

Thomas Hendrix

Nice to see the comments section attempt. Some hopefully helpful critics. First something that you yourself noticed was the length, something I have noticed that others tend to do when writing comments sections is to do them as short interlude chapters or in some cases full length ones. The second point is that the comments section felt somewhat disconnected. I think this is because of time flow. For example the people in the chat are all reacting to different events that happened at different times and in a different order than the order of there comments. While also being worthy of their own comments section. Looking back its like took the comments from four different smashed them together and randomly delete some of it. It might be help to instead do them one event at a time. For example start with calming of Bella incident


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