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Manabound - Resilience - Chapter 15

🕑 Added 2023-10-09 15:05:46 +0000 UTC

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Adam

That ending was hilarious.

Karma Baris

ITS HAPPENING

patreon_username

Oh gwyny you're in so much trouble

BelligerentGnu

That's fair. :P

Oxylus

Also, I loved the Gwyn reaction! This was a very emotional arc. I wanted to leave it on a bit of levity.

Oxylus

Oh yeah. I can see that. I'll fix that on the next pass. Thanks!

BelligerentGnu

Ahhh, that makes sense. I think your word choice in the first paragraph of that revelation is a little off - 'each sentence heavier than the last' and 'cold sinking feeling in the pit of her stomach' read like the initial stages of grief, more than just being overwhelmed with emotion.

Oxylus

Hmm, having an actual destination just overwhelmed her. She knew Gwyn was alive, but now she knows where she is. (Well, generally with that message.)

BelligerentGnu

Gwyn's ear burning was a little over the top, but Sloane's reaction was perfect :P. And now we have a set-in-stone itinerary! Adopt Mariel, get to Gwyn. Only other thing is I'm unsure why news of Tiloral was heart-wrenching. I feel like either I'm forgetting some important disaster in the area or just being dense. It seems like greater specificity should just be unabashedly positive news.

Somebody

honestly all I wanted was in this chapter

Marshall

What the fuck reaction is perfect.


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