Viewing PM: every story need a good villian | Royal Road

Foxy

Im gone for just a little bit and now you are doing this. I feel offended.

ZeroCross

Everyone Loves Large Chests gets way weirder, way more sexual than you'll ever get here. And it's doing really well on Royal Road.

ZeroCross

Maybe an omake where you pretend to jump the shark after running out of plot?

ZeroCross

The most curious part is how the "villain" is Chloe's direct opposite. Where she's a radical feminist who has gotten carried away a little bit too much, the "villain" is mega-misogynist. Do Chloe and Brian bury the hatchet to fight against misogyny?

ZeroCross

Are... are there going to be more of those fictional Patreon accounts? Because I want more.

Luke Mofford

Zhilbar, there's a Jayne Cobb quote that I feel fits here: Lets see now, 10% of nothin' is... nothin' into nothin', carry the nothin'...

Zhilbar

It was certainly intended as a compliment; the higher the HSQ the more intense the emotional investment! And I'm glad of no spoiler tags; I have a really hard time not availing myself of accessible information- as shown by me showing up here instead of just waiting for you to put up another chapter on the relevant site.

Estranged

Now that makes sense. Shows to tell I should not write comment when overly tired.

Jedi Khan

Oh? Interesting. Phase 2 in your master plan, then, before you begin the sprawling epic that even you don't know is coming. ;-)

FortySixtyFour

The sequel to AnimeCon Harem is already figured out, courtesy of my writing so much slower than I plan. It's just going to be another lame one centered around personal conflict though; RennFaire Fantasy.

Jedi Khan

Yes, but that three day convention trip could be the beginning of something more. What that more is, is entirely up to you. It could simply be start of a happily ever after for Brian and the girls, it could be the beginning of a grand quest to foil some evil demon lord with the power of a loving harem, or it could be the start of a journey to become the Harem Battle Champion. All up to you, Master Storyteller.

MayContainYuri

True. Not that such a setup can't be good. I've read one, very badly translated, novel like this and it was actually good compared to all the shitty ones you see in anime. But yeah. And the reason I took this seriously is because my brain forgot what pm means...

FortySixtyFour

Thank you! I think. I really do wish Patreon had a spoiler tag feature, I feel like most platforms have one in some way or another.

Zhilbar

It's okay, the kitty harem totally counts. But yeah, please avoid all spoilers; as you well know, it tends to spoil the experience. I like the way you shoot the HSQ (Holy Shit Quotient) of a chapter straight through the roof as things are!

FortySixtyFour

I love READING sprawling epics, but I'm not sure I could write one. My stories tend more towards personal conflict examined as closely as I can. I mean, I've written some two hundred thousand words, yet it's the story of a three-day convention trip.

FortySixtyFour

I woke up to find this and had to stare at it making a weird face until my girlfriend came over to see what the heck I was staring at, haha. Had to share it with you guys. I am actually a little worried that by posting up on Royal Road, I'm getting an audience a little too young for the themes/maturity. Or the blatant sexual stuff.

FortySixtyFour

Yeah, I can't claim credit on this one, it got messaged to me via Royal Road. Also getting a lot of comments there on people suggesting different ways for Tabitha to use her future foresight to become a billionaire... but that's not really a goal she has.

FortySixtyFour

There's a twist or two still in store for the main story, but to my frustration, I really, really don't want to spoil it yet.

FortySixtyFour

Haha, you know what I mean though, right? The setup seemed like something out of a cheesy anime with a demon lord.

FortySixtyFour

I suppose I could start hinting that her willful negligence has, in fact, gotten innocent people killed here and there. Trying to think what else I could manage to squeeze in...

FortySixtyFour

When I managed the Pizza Hut in town, I set the login password for the touchscreens to "Luau." Everyone knew what the password was, but had to ask how to spell it, every single time.

FortySixtyFour

Had to laugh out loud right away because your post reminded me of the "No!" Harry Potter copypasta that interrupts 120% of online Harry Potter discussions I've seen.

FortySixtyFour

Would Brian turn into a hunky Fantasy Wars protagonist, or a comic-relief henchman?

FortySixtyFour

There's nothing to worry about--there's literally almost no way to tell the difference between this ghost writer's work and my own. You guys won't ever know the difference.

Jedi Khan

Uh...what? I'm not good at meta thinking...wait, I get it! The acronym at least. Took a moment. Still not sure what "meta" means...? Brain starting to hurt now. Gonna get back to work and stop thinking for a bit.

no promises >xD

Miss Stephanie

Okay? I'm ok.. but you have to calm down too!

FortySixtyFour

It's So Meta, Even This Acronym

goddammit steph breathe! thats not gonna happen. you're going to keep existing, because he's GOING to keep writing. otherwise I'd trample stamp his goddamn balls to the curb. not even joking fuck this beta cuck DnD nonsense!!

Miss Stephanie

Th-this is a joke right?? Please don't ghost us Gre- er, Forty.. I think Kell would *literally* kill you IRL! A-And then we wouldn't exist anymore.. WE <gulp> wouldn't exist.. ._.</gulp>

Jedi Khan

Someone obviously wants you to try making the story into some sort of sprawling epic. And here I thought you were setting up to make this into an erotic version of Poke...er, Battle Monsters...with humans instead of creatures.

HornsOfTheseus

This was definitely not written by 40-64. He is mocking the idiot who sent him this shit as a suggestion on Royal Road by suggesting that this person could ghost write for him. I am pretty sure whoever wrote this suggestion was either an idiot or 11 (more likely both).

Estranged

This said, not everything in the story needs to be explained. What is important is that the world and the events taking place in it need to be coherent.

Estranged

I don't want to guide the story, I want to enjoy the trip. :) As for the ghost writer, it all depends on the quality. A good ghost writer is invisible but also difficult to find.

Tosk

I thought he said this was a PM he received on Royal Road with "Story Suggestions"

Estranged

Tosk, this is more a sketch to get feedback. Check below and you will see how he usually writes. :)

Tosk

Doesn't Chloe already want to steal Brian's soul? Maybe just break it.

Tosk

In addition to how generic it would make this story become I wonder if the writer of this, I guess "story" is the kindest word I have, has something against grammar and sentence structure. I had a headache by the time I was done reading this

Zhilbar

Maybe instead of trying to strengthen the premise it should just be given a one-shot as is? Sort of a Doom: Repercussions of Evil approach, though the original post is pretty close to that already. All it needs is a "you are the demons" moment and you'll be good to go. (Turns out MARA was the alien harem demon the whole time!)

Zhilbar

........Huh. Now I kinda want to go back to sleep too, and it's 2 in the afternoon. Although, if we have an alien harem demon descend on the Convention, all the cosplayers start transforming into what they're dressed up as, only the massed supernatural force of harem can keep them away (presumably by concentrating all the group's spiritual essence into the focal individual) and the whole place begins hooking up to resist (or indeed, embrace!) the demon-alien's corrupting prowess... Yeah, I STILL want almost as much nothing to do with this premise as before.

MayContainYuri

I'd rather the deadlines be missed than the story be fucked.

FortySixtyFour

On the one hand, it would make the story generic in a way that many other stories on Royal Road are. But, on the other hand--it also becomes generic in the way that many harem animes are when the writer misses a deadline or runs out of ideas and suddenly introduces supernatural aspects.

MayContainYuri

Nope, there's already enough going on without adding demons and soul-stealing and shit. So no, don't add this. That wouldn't be the kind of story I thought it was going to be, nor the kind of story I wanted it to be.

FortySixtyFour

My first immediate thought was--have I not been writing Chloe as villainous enough? I need to step up my game.

Kimu Taka

That's uh, that's something there. For a second I thought someone stole your password.

jmundt33a

I'm glad someone is doing it with sarcasm. Let me be straightforward. NO!!! A "NO!!!" as loud and long as has ever been filmed in cinema. This is the complete inversion of the story you've said you wanted to tell. Embrace your own vision. Please!!

HornsOfTheseus

Also I love the first post note. Of course, they are turning into what they are dressed like because clearly a harem fic would involve bestiality with a generic brand Flareon, ninja girls always bring water to mind and gothic lolita girls are well known for having red hair.