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After AnimeCon 2: Teary-Eyed Goodbyes

🕑 Added 2024-12-27 18:02:51 +0000 UTC

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Khuri

End After AnimeCon with the Emily line, then begin RenfairFest with this, including the Emily line?

masknshadows

I have kinda lost track of where the book ends, as the arc developed dealing with Cloe/Christine. My own confusion aside -- and it's mine, mostly from seeing chapters as they come out, nit in their final order -- you may want to consider two approaches. First, flashbacks are a good way to work in cool scenes while building tension: What is going on in the main plot? How will it resolve? No telling for now, but here's some context for something tangently related, or foreshadowing for a future plot point. As you are a skilled writer, I'm mentioning this only as a reminder it's an option. As far as fans wanting to see things? I wouldn't ignore that, but I would figure out how much space you have in the story for specific moments before those moments begin to dominate the whole story. You know what you want your pacing to look like. Long story short, keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

FortySixtyFour

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FortySixtyFour

Weapons with greater weight are at an advantage in striking and blocking! An 18 oz shortsword going up against a 12 oz shortsword of equal length will knock and batter the lighter one out of place every time they meet, while the strikes from the lighter weapon will feel as if they've met an immovable object. You're absolutely correct in that ultralights are easier to pick up and immediately be fast with, but experienced players who practice and achieve the same with increasingly heavier weapons and some tend to gravitate towards those. A weapon that can be battered or swatted out of position in every exchange is not equal to one that cannot! Although likewise you DO need to then have the muscle strength and practice to be able to wield heavier weapons in dag/bel/amp without losing out to others in speed, or tiring out more quickly or etc.

Jacob Bissey

Yeah, the LARP stuff is awesome, we don't tend to get many accurate depictions in media, lol. Of course, I'm a lightest touch LARPer, so there are a couple moments of disconnect for me like when Rebecca says the heavier swords are *better*, lol. Like, I am aware that some heavy contact fighters like weightier weapons, but I honestly struggle to see what the advantage is other than it hurts more to get hit by them (which if the goal is to cause more pain, why even use foam padding at all?), lighter weapons are faster, you have more control, you don't get worn out as quickly, and they cause fewer bruises. Of course the balance is more important than the overall weight, but assuming the light weapons and heavy weapons are roughly equivalent in how balanced they are, I just don't see the advantage to greater weight. But the discussion of doing NPC shifts to learn the game and accrue XP so you don't start off as weak is so familiar because I've had debates about that a few times over the years, and I go back and forth on whether I think it's good advice. It probably depends on the game, one with multiple player factions that apparently have independently assigned NPCs is probably a good one to do an event or two of full time NPCing to learn the ropes, since it sounds like they won't spend as much time around the plot team hearing spoilers and given the broad nature of those types of games it gives better exposure to the different aspects of the game so the newbies can get a better feel for where the think they'd have the most fun trying to fit in later when they roll in their PC.

Jeanie6754

Good job Boss. Have a relaxing evening ya hear 😜.

Joshua Cole

I don't know. The corny line from Emily is such a great endpoint. Is there a reason the next book can't start immediately after that with this?

GraySquirrelEatToast

Sorry about the editor problems, and may I say what an interesting and enjoyable story this is. In particular reading something so well done incorporating familiar LARP lingo is pretty cool.

Mocherthrath

BTW you mentioned Discord but I don't see a link. I would like to join your group.

Mocherthrath

TFTC I really appreciate this chapter. It really helps link in the future chapters.

mhaj58

Nice chapter, although I think that as far as publishing goes the Emily goodbye is better. I think that a check in around a week before Renfaire would be a good starting point. I would like to see the harem lifestyle from Emily and Christine as well as what you’ve already written in regards to the other characters. Maybe there’s some kind of middle point

Zaralith

Very nice, and a good end


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