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Chapter 61 - A bitter end

🕑 Added 2020-11-10 11:17:39 +0000 UTC

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Bakerdea

Thanks for the chapter! Can't wait to see what happens next!

fbt

I hope you're able to ignore the haters, and for that matter most of the suggestions; write what/how you want. I can see how the angry/entitled/etc crap could take the fun out of it, so I hope you can just keep on! The story may not be entirely my cup of tea, but that's OK; my prefs are atypical and solely my own. The story picked up a following quickly and the writing is pretty good. Editing aside, it flows well and reads easily, pacing is solid, etc. Best of luck!

Thaabit Rivertree

I really wanted William to be the disposable villain, not long term...

Kooooomakimi

Bruh, the fuck is your problem? It's people like you that make great authors like Zogarth stop posting chapters for the 99% that do enjoy it.

Joey McGowan

Yawn. I'm sure it'll all be well and good in the end, but the way you're taking this seems to be the way that makes every sub-par xianxia go to shit. It's a boring predictable outcome that does nothing more than irritate the reader all the way up to the big reveal. I almost regret subbing to read this

Zogarth

As explained in this chapter it came with the race evolution at 25.

Opperfapper

Only thing that upsets me is the way william suddenly gained feelings for other people, seemingly out of nowhere. It feels really jarring to me

ParoxysmDK

Also now a god cheats and keeps him alive, another ass pull imo.

ParoxysmDK

I like the story but williams entire character feels like one big deus ex machina. He literally gets ridiculous plot armor every time we read about him imo. He gets a weapon early in the story that catapults him into becoming the most dangerous of all the casters, then that weapon makes it so he can get a class more powerful than anybody else, then some smith makes a ridiculously overpowered full plate armor of epic grade, which essentially counters 90% of williams weakness'. Then we learn a god is interested in him for no reason besides him being deus ex machina with his metal powers (he literally has done nothing to gain the favour of a god, unlike jake who literally almost died multiple times, and finished a dungeon that is aeons old, and has never been finished), and now we find out he ALSO has a epic grade ability; the first we've even seen or heard of, that essentially is a pure upgrade over Jake's super rare and powerful malignant viper blood skill, -which also is a complete counter to jakes natural poison resistance and skills- again with no effort required, and for no apparent reason other than to force him into the role of Jakes archrival... I'm sorry but this feels very much one big ass pull at this point, and i REALLY hope William gets killed off soon, or for some surprise twist to happen, because it really feels predictable what williams purpose is going to be. I hope i'm wrong tho because i love the story.

Zogarth

Fixed those. Also fixed some other minor things.

BubblyGhost

as they stabbed through that guy. -> who's "that guy"? Noticed this a bit throughout the chapter where you refer to someone but it's so very unclear even with context. twenty weapons were far bigger -> that* were But he did have the enchantments. -> remove this line its tip found purchase in the man in the very center.-> again this is so very unclear of who or what is being referred to. The very center of the group? The center of the man? Which man?

Zogarth

Fixed that one. And if you find anything particularly glaring, please point it out! It is so easy to stare yourself blind and something you have written yourself.

A B

Thanks, good chapter. Needs some editing though. A few places where the sentence needs work. Also, 'enviable' --> 'inevitable'

Impulsive Monkey

I think anyone can interfere it just costs a lot of power. Remember when Jake got the blessing? That was interference and the viper was weakened

lenkite

Ok, so the [System] allows interference on this scale for the [Villain].

thanks

Amelgar

yep, we all called hacks. now we got proof :D


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