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Side Story 1: Order of the Malefic Viper (1/2)

🕑 Added 2020-11-22 15:58:57 +0000 UTC

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Linbi

viper said: did I ask?, and that mofo turned to dust bruh

Oz

“For too long have the Order of the Malefic Viper been constrained to th- “ have->has

Zogarth

Fixed

Duder

“Oh, and why would only need to be desperate?” "only" >> "I"? or "anyone"? or "you" (if she's cheeky) maybe "one"? Tell me, Tortaros, has the pillars of the hall started cracking has >> have

AnonyGuy

Probably hiding his power? He doesnt want to get worshipped afterall.

Blightdad

I thought duskleaf was a god?

Zogarth

Fixed

Johnny Smithers

"hold gathering with billions attending." gathering -> gatherings. attending -> in attendance. "And of those sixteen, was a demigod. Tortaros." -> either "And one of those sixteen was a demigod. Tortaros." or "And of those sixteen, one was a demigod. Tortaros"

Zogarth

Fixed.

An_Amazing_Username

Viridia, on the other hand, stood frozen as the scaled man made a thump up at her. Thump up -> thumbs up As with nearly all high-level titles, the details of what it provided was unknown, as none had been willing to share the details. Was -> were

Zogarth

True, dunno why I wrote that.

Damian

My Patron, you must jest. I have reached my current level faster than any other hall master or branch leader for eras, fought through countless trials, and even slain a god. Through my path I- “ He didn’t slay the god.

Zogarth

Fixed.

BubblyGhost

Hah, hubris at it's finest. That final step stumped far more than succeeded. -> Slight change, the sentence reads a tad off. Perhaps 'had stumped', 'than those who'. dimensions, *or shattering reality -> and* *were the chief alchemist -> was* *bare mentioning -> barely*

Damian

Oof

Vaccus

Amazing


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