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Chapter 115 - Records

🕑 Added 2021-01-01 15:08:32 +0000 UTC

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ZaA

Can't even be bothered to read Jacobs part after the first 5 minutes of reading stuff we already know. Why info dump stuff you've said before or inferred? Its like mentioning that Jake ate food every single time he does. Its something we don't care about so you leave it out. Its significant that Jacob is now learning it, but you could say "Jacob had been learning--extensively--about Records and how they affect leveling, titles,...." etc. One or two sentences. Not 3 page paper of re-dump lol.

zsell

Bit of an info dump, but a necessary one! We’ve had like 30 chapters of action, it’s nice to see some more world building!

Tatsu

most of the info dumb just flies out the window in my memory and only a few key parts stay these very formal world building cornerstones are best delivered in very concise sentences without all the flowery words around them take the records and experience for example the comparison to the pond and the water is great and easy to understand everything around it that describes the same concept is redundant a good way to show this stuff in a condensed form to the reader would be a simple "this is a excerpt from (insert random book title here)" and then just list the cornerstones of the world in a bullet point fashion no need to bore the reader with deliberations if you just want to give a summary of facts that are already kinda known but scattered all over might be that i just got the intention wrong and zogarth had other aims with this part but i wanted to throw some hopefully constructive criticism in

Tomer Yud

yea I kinda skipped through that

Sterban Friz

Wow an entire chapter about stuff we already knew

Zogarth

Fixed!

Thanks for the chapter. "There were even more tangible rewards set rewards by the system" too many rewards, nerf pls

StonedKnight

Thanks

Scyfe

Thanks, love the Viper's offer.

Jeremy M

Thanks!

Anki

Eyo first Edit: I have been deceived, thanks for the chapter!

BlackRazaras

Thanks for the chapter!


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