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Chapter 170 - The Battle of Fort's Deep

🕑 Added 2021-03-17 13:10:38 +0000 UTC

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L Pedersen

Naw these uncouth americans can't be compared to those stalwart british badasses.

CyclopsSlayer

It occurs to me that the title might be better as a reference to Roarke's Drift, than Helm's Deep. :)

Chris

Amy chance people might be calling him Apex (assuming he wants to be my ore mysterious than Jake), in the future?

Zogarth

I just removed the thing about the curvature. Just adds too much "information" for no reason.

Oliver Wolfe

Thanks! Note: maybe expand the following a bit to reference the nearly flat curve of the newly-enlaeged Earth, to make it more clear - "With the curvature of the Earth and Jake’s insane perception"

I mean he does cook often with vegetables and herbs, lol

Zogarth

Patreon got that dump a month ago :p But instead of making Patreon go on break, it just increased the number of advance chapters from 20 to 25.

Michael Click

❤️

Robert Downing

Here I was hoping for six chapters because of mass release on Royalroad, but good chapter nonetheless

Balsamic ThunderThighs

If Jake ever invests I'm cooking I'm pretty sure he'd become a pretty popular cook lol

Thanks for the chapter~

James Squibb

I take back my comment from the previous chapter. Knowing Jake's character, this is perfectly in line. I was just giddy for him to show off a bit lol.

Daniel Tickle

First thought: Mmmm, steak.

Derze

seems very linear progression to me. And also expected. Tutorial ends -> Jake Gets Pylon -> Finds new allies -> To progress the city you need more people -> Miranda gets appointed -> Miranda finds the Fort -> Miranda and Jake go to the Fort ....etc where is the stagnation you refer? Yes there are other plot points. Like M.Viper preparing the School Arc for Jake. There was the Mystie/Hawkie where Jake recently got control of the Lightning Tree. Jake got multiple upgrades, increased his understanding of Archery. Is learning how to use mana creatively to solve issues. And we also got snippets of the first Pylon holders up to Jake's Brother. I don't understand your point. Is it that you feel its not going fast enough?

Zogarth

Fixed it. I am too used to describing beasts with "it" :p

Loric

You kept referring to mystie as it or he instead of she, mystie is female right?

Professional_industrial_man

Thank

SlaveToMyWhims

There's few things i'm not loving here. I feel like the story is running walking trough waist deep water. It's getting very draggy and stagnant. Conversations also got very basic, bland and NPC-like. The characters feel like a single person carrying a conversation trough multiple mouthpieces in stead of different distinct characters. The final thing is that there's way to many tangents that chaps go into. As if the author comes up with a cool concept on the spot, adds it to the story, and then paints in the details right there and then. That would be fine i guess, if done tactfully, but lots of them seem rammed in. There's no flow to the story. I think i'm gonna let the story chill for a month or so and come back to it to see how it progresses. Also, fellow readers that feel the knee jerk reaction to jump in and defend the novel, I'm not being malicious for the sake of it. I'm just critiquing the novel because I like it overall and I know that the author CAN do better. I don't go out of my way to pay for patreon and write up half a chap worth of text for smth i intend to hate on for no reason. I may be odd at times, but i'm not that elaborately insane.

Nim

It's only been 4-5 chapters; less than he spent on learning to fly. All seems reasonable to me so far.

Somerito

This recruitment storyline has gone on too long.

Connor Bruha

Thanks for the chapter!

BlackRazaras

Thanks for the chapter


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