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Chapter 246 - Census Taking (Hard Mode)

🕑 Added 2021-06-27 11:01:13 +0000 UTC

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Blake Richardson

Thanks for the chapter

Dont_like_to_Talk

Thanks for the chapter

BlackRazaras

Thanks for the chapter

Zogarth

Fixed... and damn... that was a lot...

Bobtur

Thanks for the chapter ! Suggestions : "Thus, his piercing gazed through shattered the veil that sought to protect it, and just as the golem was about to dodge, it froze." > through shattered > shattered through. "Jake was not going to sit and around and wait for it to counter-attack but took a step, making him teleport back over a hundred meters as he drew another arrow." > sit and around and wait > sit around and wait, or, sit still and wait. "It fired off a few more lasers until it became clear it wasn’t going to hit." > It fired > The golem fired ? It's been two paragraphs since you didn't tell about it. "Jake spent far less resourcing dodging than it spent attacking." > resourcing > resources. "The golem arrived before him less than a second" > in less than a second, or, less than a second afterwards. "An axeblade it swung with extreme momentum as a small hole opened up as the back of its arm exploded, sending out another blast of mana to speed up the swing." > a small hole opened up as the back of its arm exploded, > a small hole opened up at the back of its arm and/then exploded, "He hoped poison mist that attacked its entire surface would help do that." > He hoped poison mist > He hoped the poison mist. "If it some kind of pure mana-sensing skill" > If it some > If it used/had. "Jake mirrored its trick as he dodged the grab by firing a blast of mana out of his gloves as he swung his blade with the other" > out of his gloves > out of one of his gloves. "He didn’t have time to think much on it" > think on it > "think about it" should be the correct use in this setting. "Unfortunately, to do so, he was forced to do something he hoped not to have to. Limit break activated at 10% as he also drew the Nanoblade. Using up his stamina more quickly was a big risk as he essentially aimed to outlast his opponent, but he was forced to do so." > Maybe remove the ",but he was forces to do so" at the end, as you already claimed in the previous paragraph that "he was forced to do something he hoped not to have to." "Jake had come to realize that trying to fight it at range wasn’t possible right now, so he decided to engage it in melee, as while difficult, it was still manageable." > " to engage it in melee, as while difficult, it was still manageable." > to engage it in melee. While difficult, it was still manageable. > English is more about making short sentences with stops/dots than making extremely long sentences with a lot of complements and commas as we do in latin and germanic languages (I'm french). A rule of thumb I learned from a native english english teacher was "If your sentence is more than 20 words and has multiple commas, you may need a dot somewhere.", although that's hardly pratical while storytelling. "All his wounds sent sizzling Blood of the Malefic Viper unto the mana shield of his foe," > unto > onto or on. "His danger sense screamed, but he could do nothing but see the blue crackle at the end of the arm as the shock came. Blue lightning audibly crackled at the length of the arm as it sent a massive amount of energy into Jake’s body." > "the end of the arm" > the end of the golem's arm. "at the length of the arm" > on its entire arm. "But he knew he couldn’t just do nothing, so he wrapped both hands around the arm as his hands began glowing green." > around the arm > around the golem's arm. "Jake clenched his jaw so much" > so much > so hard. "The same moment he touched it, the golem swung its arm" > The same moment > The moment, or, At the exact moment. "It only managed to swing five times before it froze mid-swing – this time far longer than other times it had been frozen." > than other times > than the other times. "Limit Break had also already been pushed up to 20%." > had also already been pushed > was already pushed. "The golem had ignored the attack. Believed the stick of metal to be no threat due to the lack of mana coming from it." > Believed > Believing.

Zogarth

Fixed :p

Amit

procognitive, interesting choice, however I think you want precognitive.

Eh, I'd say cutting it up would be better, but his nanoblade is only good against things without a mana shield. He needs an omni-blade that can cut through mana barriers and metal. Or more his style would be a mana-barrier piercing arrow. Like an armor-piercing round except for mana barriers instead of armor. Or he needs to learn to make a new type of poison. For metal, something acidic would be good. This fight should teach him several things. Once he gets back, he could work on his alchemy to make an acidic poison that is good against metal. I wonder if he could also make a poison he could coat his arrows with to make them punch through mana barriers.

izaak

Mind magic, human slaving, murder minotaur I think it was his weapon. Could be wrong though

Zogarth

Fixed stuff

Zogarth

Fixed stuff

Sammot

Uhh, I forgot what the pillar was, or where it came from. Came someone remind me please?

Jonathan

openings place around its limps. placed ... limbs from his glove enchant enchantment forms – and axeblade clearly one of those available shapes. an axeblade (my 'favorite' personal typo, lol) would deal too heavy damage, after all. too-heavy (I think...) His entire body did small spasms from the electrocution, and his entire body was smoking. 'entire body' twice in the same sentence being swung into the unimaginable hard ground, unimaginably

Alan Kaiser

Sun Wukong’ed the fucker

Jorge

Blunt damage is the way

Mr Fuzzknuckle

Fun chapter! Nice touch with the floating pillar taunt at the end!

Mike G.

Good chapter, thanks! "around its limps." -> limbs "but make a small platform" -> made "depleting this foes mana pool" -> foe's

Zogarth

Fixed

Jonas Larsen

This fucking this -> This fucking thing

Zogarth

Fixed

Ikawaii

several kilometers turned -> several kilometers away

Ikawaii

Limit Break had always -> already I think

Zogarth

Edited

Zogarth

Edited it a bit

"Limit Break had always been pushed to 20%." Had already been pushed? Earlier in the chap you mention 10%

"a blast of man came out of its sole" mana

Monus

Thanks

Arrogant Savant

Thanks for the chapter also nice I am first this time


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