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Chapter 229 - A Healthy Diet

🕑 Added 2021-06-07 10:27:02 +0000 UTC

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Blake Richardson

Thanks for the chapter

Blaublue

Another God wants to have a statue in Haven's temple

Bat

I wonder if the time tree survives. He kind of planted it but I feel like there were special requirements for it to survive.

Kittora

"there has been a single more application to the temple" this sentence confuses me. I am not sure what it means.

Tomer Yud

If I was jake, I would give a good portion of my money to Miranda, to boost al those who will join the treasure hunt

Thundertruck

Arnold is the tech guy from the fort who made all their electronic equipment.

Sarah DeVol

At the very beginning it says healthy potion instead of health potion. Also who is Arnold, is he from a side story?

Luciaron

Leveling from the comfort of her own home, perfect for the busy professional

Zogarth

Fixed

Corwin Amber

'decided to for it' <- re-phrasing needed 'smart to do down' <- re-phrasing needed 'half-corporal' corporal -> corporeal

Tomer Yud

well if your name is Affinity, than sure ;P

Zogarth

A fixed some things, but nothing's wrong with a sentence fragment here and there for dramatic effect.

Jonathan

It had a small mark on it that it could neither detected with its mana sense nor seen with its eyes. detect, see but there was just too many. were these creatures didn’t respawn or that new ones appeared… so if they could somehow defeat them all… these creatures didn’t respawn and no new ones appeared, so if they could somehow defeat them all… Not a single trace of what had happened or a single body left over. Fragment, and all the things I can think of to add make it look redundant, may need a rewrite. Miranda collapsed to the ground, sweat pouring down her face as she heaved heavily. A bit of blood was even flowing out her mouth as she had taken a bit of damage towards the end from pushing herself too far. heaved heavily just sounds strange --> her chest heaved. was even flowing is passive voice. I'd go with 'even flowed', or 'She even felt a bit of blood flowing...'

Amelgar

>The first few mushrooms always gave the best insights laughed at this line

Zogarth

Fixed.

RedFaux

Heh. I wonder if theres an Affinity-Affinity

Monus

Thanks! "Miranda didn't a typical..." I think you are missing a have right?

Dont_like_to_Talk

Thanks for the chapter

BlackRazaras

Thanks for the chapter


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