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Chapter 244 - Heartwarden

🕑 Added 2021-06-24 11:08:08 +0000 UTC

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I love how he struggling to find strong enough opponents

Blake Richardson

Thanks for the chapter

He needs his own primal huntress parter in mushroom crime

Emby

Fun chapter. Thanks

Loipers

"Jake dodged all the spears, now falling disorganized towards his body easily." I suggest an edit of some kind, the grammar of the sentence gets worse the more I look at it. I think this replacement carries the same meaning a little more clearly: "Jake easily dodged all the spears, as the projectiles now fell towards his body without direction or organization."

Tomer Yud

+1 for romance, give jake some love ;p

Hickity

I wouldn't be against casual romance but at the same time, it wouldn't bother me too much if you avoided it. I think just having some romantic elements can be nice, if it's casual and not a focus it shouldn't bother anyone too much and it's not like Jake's the type of person to obsess over someone, he'd probably want to be with someone just as standoffish as he is lol. Anyone who reads this and expects a fully written romantic subplot has very odd expectations.

Amit

It has a one week lockout but gets nerfed every other week until the system gives up and adds an LFG function.

So, if someone else comes to this Dungeon in the future, it will be full of Deepdwellers again, right? What about the big prize that Jake is about to go for. Assuming he claims it and brings it out, will there be another one if someone else comes to the Dungeon in the future? Will the Dungeon keep generating more grand prizes? Or will the grand prize be something that cannot be taken from the Dungeon?

Nate

i can see his teleport skill being used as a primer to get his arrow skill to another rank. maybe not the next rank but the rank after.

Syntrx

Found a youtube channel that'll probably help with your writing: Filmento. Or at least a video that'll help. Video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RREdYFq9tVQ Here's a little warning, the video contains spoilers for: Mission Impossible Fallout (2018), Captain America: Civil War (2016), Sherlock Holmes: A Game of Shadows (2011), and probably more, since I just copy-pasted what was in the description of the video.

Jonathan Brewster

It is the challenge. The Primal is willing to accept any, and all, challenges to grow. This dungeon will be another speed bump on his road to immortality if I had to guess.

StarWolf

Would a human even be interested in the same thing(s) or have the same motivations that a tribe of semi-sentient mushrooms be interested in or motivated by?

Matt S.

He always wants that sweet loot :)

Matt S.

I don't mind. Considering how socially awkward Jake is it could be a lot of fun to watch if written well. :)

Patrick Schuldt

Petition against romance!! +1

SpaceGoddess76

So is it the easiest choice in his life because a bunch of mushroom worshiping beings wanted which would mean he would not want it or is it the easiest choice because it’s probably something great that he wants it?

Zogarth

See, this was my point. Some people hate any kind of romance, no matter how minute.

Zogarth

Fixed.

Jonathan

Jake cared little for the attack but send sent

Edward

Please no romantic tropes. It's already been done a thousand times and would feel out of place in this context and bring little value to this story.

thkiw

deepdweller society: hundred of years of preperation, mushroom worship, and prayer. crying tears of joy upon their upcoming success to reach the sacered inner sanctum. jake: "it's free real estate!"

Zogarth

Fixed

Ikawaii

Funalmancers

GuyWhoReadsALot

I bet he just stops and goes home and learns to knit.

Zogarth

Maybe, but romance will never be a major focus of the story. The thing with romance is that everyone on the internet either completely hates it, or has extreme levels of expectations of how well it needs to be done. People also tend to either want the author to fully lean into it or not at all. Having it more casual tends to get so damn much hate I am honestly not sure if it is even worth bothering with trying to any kind of romance.

Kevin Zhang

I know this isn't the best chapter to ask but have you considered a romantic sub-plot, y'know a little something something. Hell, maybe even just some romantic elements, y'know just a little smooch on the cheek.

Very nice

BlackRazaras

Thanks for the chapter


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