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Chapter 357 - Exploring Relationships

🕑 Added 2021-12-02 11:47:02 +0000 UTC

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Fortunis

Jesus its like Caleb is channeling my brother.

Blake Richardson

Thanks for the chapter

Danielle Warvel

Families, am I right?

Nick Nicholson

All right so kill off William and now Ms Kim they both suck ass

patrick bennett

Helped mystie not Sylphie

Zogarth

Fixed.

Jonathan

as he grit his teeth. gritted

Finn Ryan

Just wanted to leave a comment saying how much I am enjoying the story and how much I appreciate the effort you put in.

Conner LaFleur

Awesome family interaction lol

Jake narrated how he had helped Sylphie (mystie)with the magical ritual and how he cared for the egg

Juan Hasbun

Hrm, iirc William during the Tutorial had a twisted "Main Character" mindset combined with his sociopathic tendencies right upto when Jake turned him into crater paste. I'm curious if he still has that mind set still? It sort of feels like William is demonizing Jake in his mind - placing him on a pillar of 'evil' and turning him (Jake) into the Main Bad Guy in Williams Story.

Vega

That old guy kicked Jake’s ass but threw out his hip doing it!

Gavriel

😂; big bro revenge

Zogarth

Y, fixed.

Sean Field

Thank you for the chapter! Possible edit: "ripples before him" -> "rippled before him" to maintain tense?

Zogarth

Fixed!

Corwin Amber

'powerful monsters spoke' monsters -> monster 'couldn’t even go further' -> 'couldn’t go further'

Heraclitus

Meeting the family has been gold. And poor William (not really). So traumatized by the big bad hunter.

Zogarth

:-)

Merceless

Thanks for the chapter. Possible discrepancy: “Additionally, he had learned some interesting things from the parents of the yellow-eyed monster.” Did William ever see him with yellow eyes or is he going off how others described him?

Zogarth

Edited one of them, but surrounding does have different implications than "around". If you are surrounded by beasts, it makes it sound like you are trapped, while if they are just aound you, it's a passive situation.

Dont_like_to_Talk

Thanks for the chapter

Bladesunder

The following arent wrong, but phrasing: the beasts around him > the surrounding beasts the space around him >the surrounding space the magic around him > the surrounding magic

Zogarth

Fixed

Simon

Now we're talking! Little brother's been too cheeky lately. Time to put him back in his place lol

Vaccus

the prim --> the brim

Jana

A strange Sense for Names seems to be quite the MC thing. :-).

Rick White

Thank you

BlackRazaras

Thanks for the chapter

Markus Iversen

Tftc

Detrox

Nice


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