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Chapter 42 (Updated)

🕑 Added 2024-03-29 22:07:15 +0000 UTC

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Benjamin Lewis

I like the idea of the town operating it's gym as a kind of hive, that's a fun concept that I haven't seen before!

Incarnated Whisp

Thank you! I've changed it to "The artificial creature demonstrated inhuman skill."

Kendelle Trotter

"The artificial creature displayed an inhuman display of skill" Redundant word use like this isn't the best stylistically speaking. I suggest: "The artificial creature (demonstrated/performed/made) an inhuman display of skill" If you choose demonstrated it should be "demonstrated inhuman skill" or "demonstrated an inhuman feat of skill"

Incarnated Whisp

That was a mistake. I have a lot of unfinished fictions in my google drive, so even though they're divided by folders, they'd all be named "Chapter X" if I didn't differentiate them somehow. I entered the wrong title when setting up the chapter, but it should be fixed now!

Incarnated Whisp

Thank you! I really appreciate your suggested edits!

Kronos07

Out of curiosity, is there any reason you went from the naming format of "Chapter 41" to "Specialist 41"?

Jazehiah

This was fun.

Kronos07

Thanks for the chapter! Edit Suggestions: "Make some kind plan" -> "Make some kind of plan" "These trials were designed around relative team strength rather than explicit number of Gym Badges" -> "These trials were designed around relative team strength rather than an explicit number of Gym Badges" "before he could ." -> "before he could." "He put down a finger ." -> "He put down a finger." "But their headstrong “leader” had his Nidorina and Nidorina" -> "But their headstrong “leader” had his Nidorina and Nidorino" "by having Mankey tossing her into the air" -> "by having Mankey toss her into the air" "the turned their anger towards her." -> "they turned their anger towards her."

Steven

Thanks for the chapter


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