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Chapter 45

🕑 Added 2024-04-08 22:51:23 +0000 UTC

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Incarnated Whisp

Thank you!

Kronos07

Thanks for the chapter! Edit Suggestions: "learning new moves don’t matter" -> "learning new moves doesn’t matter" "how long she’s been with Sam" -> "how long she’d been with Sam" "Sam usually only saw in experienced trainers" -> "Sam usually only saw inexperienced trainers" "He wasn't going give it a chance to wake up" -> "He wasn't going to give it a chance to wake up" "caused a lout buzz" -> "caused a loud buzz"

Incarnated Whisp

Thank you!

Drasolvent

Edit Suggestions. ‘more important things he could be doing’ Missing period. ‘He just had to claw with his hand, and he just had to allow the Ghost Type energy to pour into it.’ The double ‘he just had to’ in the same sentence is awkward. ‘He had promised before that their team would never beat, ‘ Never [be] beat? ‘But when we take you into account. When we take into your incredible physical strength and the way you can actually fight…”’ The second ‘we take’ makes it a bit rough to read.  Maybe could be one sentence. ‘Everything started to get misty’ No period. ‘Like I’ll need it,” Redi’ Sentence doesn't continue, so it should be a period instead of a comma.


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