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Chapter 173: Dark Shift

🕑 Added 2018-10-08 08:57:44 +0000 UTC

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Almost each chapter is a new discovery for the reader. I like them. My only nitpick would be how I don't see how Nisha has enough time for all of her activities. But time seems to be a meta problem as well. It has been a month since the last chapter...

Woah!

Ato

I'll have to agree here, the start was a lot more... exciting? the academy just has been painfully slow and very sidetracky

I am sorry to say that and know that i enjoy your work very much, but in the 10 last chapters, i feel you don't have advanced in any of the main storylines (aka the academy, building up the slums, nisha babysitters (the 2 goddess and the dragon prince)). I understand that building the world and its different workings in an essential part of any fantasy book, but it must be balanced with the advancement of the story or you risk loosing the interest of your readers. Since the start of the academy ark, the timeline as barely progressed (2 or 3 weeks at best) and i feel that your storytelling as shifted from effective and thrilling to tolkienish (in the way that you skip entire chapters of descriptions of its books).

First of all thank you for the chapter On the second hand, i am felling more and more that the story is loosing its ryhm and is loosing itself in meaningless sideways


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