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Sheltered CH45 - Something Leaks in the Night

🕑 Added 2022-08-13 23:53:55 +0000 UTC

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Joyce's mom and Isabelle I think hit a similar archetype when it comes to bold actions and forcefulness. They're the types that disregard the normal game with the typical rules that Joyce is so used to playing by. Since she prefers to be control, working with people that completely rob her of it are her most challenging moments, I'd say. I can't put a concrete number to how long they've been together, but I'm hoping to convey over time that their relationship has been going on for some time now. A slight regret looking back on it now is chronologically speaking, how quickly Joyce and Emily fell into what they have now. While in terms of chapters it may not be the worst progression into diapers, the same can't be said for time that's actually passed in the story. Either way, thank you so much for enjoying!

If I'm hitting a trope or a cliche, I hope that I'm at least giving it a slight bit of nuance or maybe that I've "earned" it by taking time to build things into it. As long as it's a result of a natural progression, I think it'll seem fair to read about. Yes...I have been using question marks a little bit. I've second-guessed myself in places, but not quite enough. It's something with speaking normally that I think doesn't hit quite as well while reading. It's really meant to imply a tone someone's voice can have where it can sound like the same rise there might be when asking a question, but not really. I may not have explained that very well, but the point still stands I'll try to be a little more critical about avoiding that. Thank you for the comment! I consider myself to be pretty amateur when it comes to writing, so if I can improve in any sort of way, I'll likely try to strive for it. For an endgame, I can't say that I have a specific scene in mind. There is however a bucket list kind of goals or milestones that I'd like to hit with Emily and Joyce. Places (literal and metaphorical) that I want them to go. It's possible for more ideas to sprout, which they have, but the net direction of the story hasn't changed and isn't aimless. Thank you for the kind words and feedback!

Them's the breaks when you're in prison pajamas. Emily better not be catching flack for this one about the bed...

Apologies and thank ya for waiting so patiently (and excitedly!)

Yes! A stern Joyce is a good Joyce! I've been trying to think of some fun ways to have Emily wind up with some kind of "punishment," whether it's exactly real or not. If it's a question about Joyce being capable of giving a punishment or not, though, I definitely think she could. Or maybe if she had any sort of reservation, I don't think it would be impossible to guide her in that direction... Thank you as always for reading and commenting!

Ulthernon

A little funny, but I also feel for Joyce getting flustered and talked over by Isabelle and previously her mom! I've been re-reading earlier chapters, and it's kind of amazing to think of how little time has passed in the story. Only two or three months I think? But the pacing still remains plausible, natural, and engaging! Can't wait for whatever is next!

I see very few writers weave a narrative as deftly as you do. You're hitting the familiar tropes within the genre, but the slow buildup, and actually developed characters make it all the more satisfying to read. I always catch myself with a smile on my face when a cute moment between Joyce and Emily comes around. I'm also really curious to see what else is going to happen outside those moments. You do seem to use question marks at the end of sentences where they don't really seem to fit. Honestly though, that's just me being pedantic. Your work makes me happy to be a patron. Do you have an endgame in mind for this story? I'm not asking what or when it is, and I'm certainly not saying it should end soon, but I'm curious as to your vision on this story.

Jared Godwin

Oof, shoulda expected things to go down that way but yikes

Jared Godwin

FINALLY IT HAS ARRIVED. I have been checking my notifications every 3 hours (except while driving of course) since I finished the last chapter and am about to read this one.

Thank you for another wonderful chapter. These characters are growing so much. I can’t help but get a tickle in my stomach whenever Joyce, sweetly stern, calls Emily out on her pout with a promise to tap her butt to get her in line. I’m wondering if Joyce would ever keep that promise to Emily and what Emily could ever do to provoke that? Lovely chapter, new firsts for our leading ladies, and brilliant writing! Thank you!


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