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Slapstick Together Chapter 1 REBOOT (22)
🕑 Added 2024-02-17 02:36:19 +0000 UTCAlrighty!
Sorry this one took a bit longer! To be completely honest with y'all, despite enjoying Valentine's Day, is DOES kinda kick my ass emotionally, so even though i've still been drawing all week, it's taken me a lot longer to actually finish things up, but i'm gettin' back on my feet, don't you worry!
Now then, we got quite a few changes on this one!
For starters, i've made a few adjustments to the overall flow of the whole comic! so, before, the last four pages were the start of chapter 2, BUT, this is now the FINAL page for Chapter 1.
This way, Chapter 2 starts off with them arranging their date, and that makes more sense to me! but of course, i may still go back and change things around again, but that's part of the fun of documenting the making-of of this comic with you guys!
Secondly, i did some major tweaking of Magna's inner dialogue!
i wanted to show off her hesitation to get so attached so quickly! Even though she's a BABE, i always imagined she had a pretty baron romantic life (she talks about it briefly much later in the comment, where she explains that she's a bit of a grump and therefor not very approachable) so having someone not just accept and "put up" with her bruteness, but also embrace it, is really sweet to her
and finally, i changed the first panel to flow in a bit better from the last page, by having the Leo rocket come crashing down instead of him just jumping into frame like in the sketch! i feel it helps give a bit of continuation, and i think enhances the joke, how he shoots up in excitement but then so quickly plummets back down!
oh, and i extended the final panel to accommodate for the new dialogue. i think that's it!
thank you for your patience! onto the next page!
