Action Toys page 13 (experiment)

Trevor Bond

Lots of work, but we appreciate it very much!

SanePerson

I don't like drawing painfull things, which is ironic, considering that I'm a bdsm lover) So I specifically choosen less painfull form of spanking.

Shremedy

Striking with something longer and narrower, like a yardstick, might be more effective. Broad surfaces distribute the impact more; what's being used now is in the realm of ping-pong paddles, good for general warmup. Length adds leverage, which adds force, especially with a little bit of wrist snap just before the stroke connects. I'm sure Remote will fine-tune technique as it goes. Classic wooden (or plastic) yardstick for Raven, spring steel for the damage-resistant Starfire.

SanePerson

it's a very beggining of a spank process - that's also why their asses is of a normal color in top panels. And both girls are regulary in a fights, so they have pretty high pain resistance to moan from the start, I tried to show in animation for their faces that they endure pain without showing. But little spoiler - pretty soon whey will start to look less confident and calm )

Second of Many

Such a fun page! Their asses look so inviting. Got to enjoy seeing them spanked. Especially with the animated pages! The dialogue's also so much fun. Raven and Starfire mocking and teasing Control Freak, even as they are helpless against the spanks, is hilarious. Really sells the stakes of the scene. THey got a small win, but they are just as helpless as before and their sexy body remain his playthings to be enjoyed, whether they like it or not. One thing. I love the dialogue, but maybe there should be some mmphs to go alongside the smacks? Especially given, as an animated page, we're really getting to see and enjoy their punishments? Seeing the dialogue punctuated by that wonderful SMACK effect is a great touch, but makes he wonder why Raven and Starfire continue their gagtalk instead of squealing and moaning as they are spanked. I don't think the dialogue needs changing, just an addition of some colour coded mmphs next to the SMACKs to show each of them responding to the spanks I feel that will really sell the balance of the scene, seeing them attempt to taunt COntrol Freak over their victory, but can't escape embarrassing themselves with moans as they get spanked and punished.

Valjean_22

This is absolutely amazing, in love with the animation!

pages like this is why I'm subbed. Best page from the comic so far and the animation is a REALLY nice touch too.

SanePerson

they moking him in his face, but looking at each other for moral support) And of course they looking smug after how previous 3 pages went down

George

Love the scenario, but I am little confused about the “plot” here. I think it’s because Raven’s text is ambiguous whether she’s talking to CF or Star? Raven could be asking Star if she’s okay but Star looks too happy behind the gag while the text reflects frustration. Their eyes are looking towards each other but the CF box is located at the bottom right so they aren’t directing mockery at him or gloating.

tripalloca

wow thats awesome, I love how the story is going