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Lost memories - 10
🕑 Added 2023-11-07 13:57:47 +0000 UTC"I got lost in my own universe
what about you?
I won't do it again, I haven't found any answers
what if I can never go back and this noise won't ever stop?"
-Universos infinitos - Love of Lesbian
https://youtu.be/VQrnD1_34z4?si=ZNjr5XP5GciWGQ8K
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This episode is way shorter than some of the previous one! I'm sorry! but I couldn't imagine this in any other way--!
Mix at this point of the story is remembering Pixi and how they became friends, now she realizes who she is and started to miss her, thus, making her get out even more from this ethereal prison she seems to be in.
I wanted to keep he emphasis I made with the test comic I did about Pixi, that she's always trying her best, but since she's not very lucky or very smart in comparison with the rest of exigus mice, she tends to be alone.
the original name of this wasn't "memory" but "interlude" but I think it would break the episode names, so I decided to keep it as memory 10 still.
I still got some doubts with the texts in English, so I'm also thankful for every correction you send me so I can improve this thing... more eyes checking, always useful!
UPDATE 1- some text updates, thanks @Kit Foxboy
Comments
AndrΓ©s Barra
thanks, they're a good suggestions! <3
Kit Foxboy
Oh wow. So heavy and cute. Love how this one is so non-linear. So some minor correction suggestions. They are more optional colloquial things rather than an off translation. You might want "You are my only friend in all of this word" to "my only friend in the whole world." Just a more common phrasing here. You could also change "How do you keep a smile all the time?" to "How do you keep smiling all the time?" Super minor, the phrasing you chose still works.
