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The Janitor, Part 13

🕑 Added 2023-04-28 16:36:57 +0000 UTC

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Zaceria

Shame Muchbirth on DA retired from writing, they're birth scenes with your pregnancy and expansion scenes would be the perfect combo! I'd offer to help out but I'm already writing for Lusty's Preg animations with what little time I have free these days.

Kompera

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed! I guess I'm just too lazy to write a character giving birth to multiple children. 😂 I need to hire someone who likes writing birth scenes and just make them do it for all my stories lol

Zaceria

God damn! If there’s one signature part of your writing and stories it’s the unbelievable strain your characters endure and how you describe it all. Love it!!!! ^^ That’s was a great birth scene as well, love the desperation and struggle. I just really wish characters would stop blacking out after birthing just 1. Be great to see a character forced to endure a long labor and multiple births, where they’d wish they could escape into unconsciousness.

Kompera

Yeah, I'm kind of not sure why I excluded him. I guess I just didn't picture him in the scene for some reason.

Brimmingbelly04

Have to say, I'm surprised the Janitor wasn't there when Derek gave birth. After everything he did to get him to that incredible point, I would've thought he'd be there to watch or maybe try in vain to prolong/prevent it? Can't wait to see what happens going forward

Kompera

I fear commentary has no impact on my personal tastes 😂 What's great about writing is that it's subjective. Sometimes newer writers take any amount of intelligent constructive criticism to heart, but there actually aren't any rules regarding descriptiveness. It's really up to each writers' preference. I could write all my stories as one big expository summary, and there still wouldn't be anything technically wrong (and some people would even like that). On the other hand, some stories face criticism for being too descriptive. Particularly lot of the classics, like The Hobbit, Lord of the Flies, etc. In the end, you can't please everyone. Perhaps your commentary would work better on someone who is less accustomed to filtering through various & often conflicting offerings of constructive criticism. 😉 & Thanks so much for joining the Prompt tier! As long as your request follows the guidelines, should be fine 😃

PferdHerder

One small detail I really liked was the part when Nick gawks at Derek's boobs as he starts to nurse in the hospital. I'm intrigued thinking up ways to expand on those kind of moments. I think the "checking out her engorged boobs as she's nursing, trying not to get caught" trope is really under-explored. That's really hot.

PferdHerder

I hear you. Yeah, I kind of figured it was a preference (plus not being "banned from the internet"). (After all, I think you're insightful enough to figure out how to write saucier sex/birth scenes if you were interested without too much feedback from the likes of me.) Then again, commentary from others is one way to be inspired or for our tastes to change. *wink wink* I signed up for the prompt tier so it will be an interesting challenge figuring out how to optimize my request within the parameters of what I understand to be your tastes.

Kompera

Thanks so much! so glad you liked it! I have a lot of difficulty getting myself to write birth scenes, but it's always fun to hammer one out from time to time!

Kompera

Great idea, but that's too messed up even for me. 😂

Kompera

I appreciate your feedback. I'm definitely intentionally vague in the areas you mentioned. There are several reasons for this, one of them being the content guidelines on DA and Patreon. Many people know that I've had a lot of stories removed from DA in the past, and I am unwilling to develop a bad reputation with patreon or risk being flagged. A second reason for my deliberate vagueness is just that these things don't interest me. I don't find much interest or enjoyment in descriptive sex or birth scenes. It's kind of funny, because I have the opposite frustration. I find it quite difficult to browse platforms like DA for writings, because of the focus on birth scenes over the introspection and expansion. I guess we all just have our own preferences.

PferdHerder

I liked the birth content! I feel like it's very "heady," though, and less "bottomy." Like, I want to really feel the pressure in his butt and the sensation of trying to push something huge out of there. It reads much more like Derek lives in his head and his body is just sort of giving birth on its own, and the pushing, for instance, is described as painful, but it's not actually viscerally experienced --- his body is going through it, but it reads like he's having an out-of-body experience. (Same thing with the dry-pushing, which is mentioned as happening and sounds fucking hot, but , for instance, the awful sensation of really bearing down and trying to push a baby out of your ass --- that picture isn't painted.) No offense... I really like reading your work. It's just frustrating to me at times because I wish it got more physical in some ways (e.g., also the sex scenes often feel as though they're described from afar or are vanishing into the distance just as they are getting started).

Zork27

Here's an idea for a future installment: how about his sister Amy comes to visit to see her new nieces and nephews, only to catch Derek and the janitor in the act of making even more of them, and she finds out what's been going on? Derek will be absolutely relieved that his torment is over, but instead of calling the cops, she makes a deal with the janitor where she becomes complicit in the blackmail in exchange for him knocking her up too, and Derek's heart just sinks as he watches his sister getting impregnated too.

Smidgeon

God, I f***ing love the way you write the birth. Please, please please pretty please with sugar on top, more of that! The sinking realization that it's happening, the dreaded inevitability, the unstoppable and embarrassing physical processes, and the enticing weirdness of a male going through all of it... It's just so, so goddamn good.


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