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Undying Empire: B1 — 42. The Parting Ceremony

🕑 Added 2020-07-04 08:17:10 +0000 UTC

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SME

Okay, just updated it with your corrections. TY as always, and sorry it took me so long to get to such simple changes T_T

SME

TY, I'll get to that in a bit!

Denis Dube

Best part of this chapter: when Yeppa's name comes up. Then it all falls into place and you know the fire is lit! Suggestions: * "and more weapons mean a stronger force", means * "but the loss in our river supply of resources", supply of resources from the river? * "Two buildings collapsed from water", flooding? * "we needed better irrigation for diverting the water", AFAIK irrigation is strictly a farming tech. From context, protecting buildings, a levee makes more sense. * "their opinion was highly regarded", I feel a but is missing before this

Katherine

To be fair, they've dreaded her sense she first crossed over with a skeleton. She's now revived a literal legendary existence from their most legendary war.....

Martynas Samsonas

thanks for chapter :D. And im so looking forward to the ammount of dread Elinor is gona put into those ribots.


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